Velvet Riot - Letters Of Last Resort (original song)

Thank's a lot. Thank's for taking this seriously. I love it. But I have some remarks.

1. Mini solos and solos - this is the best part. Nothing to change here. I think i wrote it quite well and your beat suits it wonderfully.

2. Intro - I would remove all drums in first half and leave just guitars (from 0:15 to [d]0:35[/d]) and in the second section (from [d]0:35[/d] to 0:50) i think it would sound better if you played only the cymbals without this accent on one

Not |-X--c--c---c-c-c-| but just |----c--c---c-c-c-| if you know what I mean. The same pattern - the pattern is great but without the bass drum on one.

The intro is intended to sound a little like Iron Maiden - Clairvoyant - in first section there is only guitar, in second there are some more instruments, but the drum is minimal - limited to simple single cymbal and then all hell gets loose

3. The verses and choruses. There is little or none difference between them and verse goes to chorus without any accent. Maybe you could play the verses simpler - the same rythm / pattern but without hi-hats on every 1, 2, 3 and 4 do some accent when it goes to the verse and the verse the way you play it now?

(The choruses are those started with 'radio 4 is silent')

These are just my impressions as a listener but I'm not a drummer so i'm not sure if they make sense to you. Even without those changes all sounds great, but you asked for opinion - you get it. Hope you think they are alright.

BTW. I'm mostly interested to record some let's say studio audio version of the song with best possible quality. I will re-record some of my tracks because now i see some flaws, and some were just recorded to see how the whole song looks like.

I recorded it in bandlab.com - it's basically a free online daw editor with effects and audio tools with possibility to work on one track by multiple persons with better control on audio quality. Maybe you would be interested in that. We could test there some ideas for some parts and check which one sounds best. We could prepare the final track from multiple takes glued together. I'm not sure if that is easy or possible with drums but here it is not easy to record whole song in one take. Tell me what you think about it. You could first check the bandlab.com and see what I mean.

Sorry for that many comments, but I'm very impressed and I think the song is going in the right direction.

After writing all those comments, i listend to the song again and again and again and started to think that they have no sense and the drum track is already perfect and the way intended by the author.

Thanks. I will be offline until 09 july. I'll see it when I come back.